Portfolio Plan

       When it comes to making the changes to my research essay, I need to make my freaking point more clear in my introduction. There are two different sentences in my essay and it seems like readers can't decide which one is my thesis from there. Also in my first body paragraph, I plan to add in my statistics there rather than in my person experience paragraphs. Along with some other small edits I find in the process of making these bigger changes.
       I'm going to add in my essay about senior year being a very stressful time. I personally thought this was one of my strongest essays I've written this semester. It was easy to write to since I'm fresh out of high school. I think it'd be nice in my portfolio.
      My reflection essay is definitely going to be fun to think about how I've changed as a writer throughout the semester. I plan to discuss how the mini essay was a preview to see how you as a teacher grade and what is expected, and then go from there and talk about how your teaching style helped me learn a lot this semester.

Video Project Link

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Favorite Paragraph

My favorite paragraph from my research paper on Gender-Based Violence Awareness 


     During the civil rights movement, sexual discrimination was formed. Since then sexual harassment has originated and designed to be seen as a separate form of crime from sexual discrimination. Sexual harassment is defined as, “uninvited and unwelcome verbal or physical behavior of a sexual nature especially by a person in authority toward a subordinate, as an employee or student” (Merriam-Webster). Women have continued to enter the workforce at increasing numbers within the last decade. Due to the high amount of women working in today’s society, sexual harassment has also grown tremendously. 

Favorite paragraph from my research paper!

Connie Lenart

The paleo diet consists of preferably organic fruits and vegetables, grass-fed beef, hormone and antibiotic-free meat, some nuts, and seeds. There are a few vegetables that should be avoided on the paleo diet. Potatoes and sweet potatoes contain a large amount of starch which turns into glucose in the body.  While glucose is necessary for the human metabolism, it should be ingested in moderation.  Other foods that should be eliminated are peanuts, legumes, and grains. Legumes, such as lentils, pinto beans, black beans, soy and peanuts, all contain small amounts of protein and large amounts of carbohydrates. This can cause a large glycemic response. Grains contain gluten and which causes inflammation and can lead to disease. Cropped foods, such as peanuts, grains, and rice, are stored in large masses which cause the crops to mold and toxins to develop.  This is the main cause of allergies.  


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Favorite Paragraph Steph Welsh

Everyone’s way of living should not be an open book, we as human beings should have privacy, our lives should not be in the news, or in court. Being a family is difficult enough, and struggling to become a married couple only adds to the stress of everyday life. “A year ago when the State allowing businesses to deny service to gays and lesbians” (Billeaud). For basic civil rights for gays should one day be the thing of the past. “Some believe the White House would likely welcome a court ruling allowing the federal government to disregard state bans on same-sex marriage. I suspect that the Obama administration would not be in any way disappointed if they lose this lawsuit (Eidelson)”. Laws can’t define sexual orientation; There are still so many Businesses that denies homosexuals service, and I believe that is awful disrespectful, and discriminating of human rights.

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Research Paper Favorite Paragraph Assignment

"Speaking from experience, I know how hard it is for a child to go to school when they are constantly getting bullied every single day through social media. My sophomore year of high school, a group of juniors would continue to text me and message me on social media saying hurtful things for absolutely no reason. At this time, I absolutely dreaded going to school because I was constantly in fear that I'd have to face the individuals who bullied me. After a month of ongoing bullying, I asked my parents if I could transfer to a different high school in hopes that the hurtful comments would stop. Instead of pulling me out of my current high school, they told me to stand up for myself and tell administration if I needed to. I was fortunate enough to get the classmates who were bullying me to stop before things got out of hand. I was even able to talk a little with one of my coworkers about his life in public school. His name is Aaron, and he shared with me that he actually dropped out of school in the 6th grade because he was overweight and was so scared to go to school because his classmates would bully him at school, and then continue to bully him on the Internet. It was nearly impossible for Aaron to escape his bullies, he didn't even feel safe in his own house. Aaron was then homeschooled, where he was able to lose weight and gain confidence back. He is now attending Front Range Community College and has so much confidence and is truly a great guy. Although he definitely suffered through multiple years of getting bullied, he was fortunate enough to escape those bullied and have a positive future. Not all bullied victims are able to overcome their bullies. Unfortunately, my classmate that I mentioned before was one of many young adults who just couldn't handle the constant bullying. Alyson Dossat never got to graduate high school or attend senior prom, and unfortunately there are many other things that Alyson will not get to experience all because of cyber-bullying. It is easy to forget or not think of how seriously cyber-bullying can affect individuals until one sits down and think of all the terrible tragedies that have happened due to this crime. Unfortunately, it took losing one of my classmates to realize how traumatizing cyber-bullying can truly be to an individual. However, it seems that no matter how many teenagers we lose, adolescents are still out there bullying."

Research Paper Prospecti Voting

Winning Thesis: "Cyber-bullying is not only illegal, but it is becoming the most popular form of bullying among young adults." By Renee Fannon

   For our group choice we decided to pick Renee's thesis point as the best thesis for several reasons.  First, we chose it because it's not only an interesting topic, but has also become a major issue in today's world topic. Renee also had an emotional connection to the subject of cyber bullying and has experienced it happening to a close friend of hers.  We also chose Renee's thesis because it is a clear and concise thesis.