Chapter 13 Reading Response

       I remember being in high school and nobody could tell the difference between argumentative and persuasive papers. It was a huge pet peeve of mine. So when Chapter 13 immediately started off with telling the readers the difference between argumentative and persuasive I was a very happy camper. I know I've said in my previous blog posts that I really enjoy writing papers and I find it rather easy. The same goes for learning about how to better myself as a writer. I really enjoyed this chapter because instead of giving me a lesson, it sort of gave me tips. Rather than saying "first you do this, then you do this" it was more of a "hey, try remembering this the next time you write a paper and you might do better". The best section in this chapter would have to be the "Deduction" portion. Basically, it informed me how I can properly break down my main point into more specific examples. This is something I have had trouble with; overgeneralizing is a major issue. So the fact that this chapter actually broke it down for me rather than just saying "don't overgeneralize", it'll definitely help me in the long run.

Argument Beyond Pro and Con Reading Response

        As a child I never once read a comic book or anything along those lines. So hopefully I was able to follow along in the comic and really grasp what the purpose of this writing piece is. From what I was able to dissect from this comic, was that these two main characters were trying to demonstrate how to construct arguments in an essay. Instead of just listing how to construct it, they illustrated examples that nearly every reader would understand. For example, when the characters were discussing the "What, How, Who, Why" factors they used the story of the Goldy Locks and the three bears. This is an old tale that a majority of people have heard of, so using this story to explain Claims and Evidence it helped me grasp the lesson a lot easier.
        In the future, I know I can use this little comic story if I ever forget how to construct argumentative essays. Although I know the difference between persuasive and argumentative, it does not mean that I sometimes have trouble sticking only to argumentative. However, this comic will come very handy in the future and will definitely help me if I ever forget what should go into an argumentative paper.

Connie Lenart Chap 13 cont.

Ethos, Pathos, and Logos three basic persuasion:
Logos are logical appeals-reasonable appeals, thoughtful, good reason, and evidence.
Pathos appeal to emotions (feelings) speak to your audience.
Ethos ethical appeal establish credibility being fair.

Argument Beyond Pro and Con
The cartoon was explaining the same as ch 13, however the pictures were helpful to visualize the situation.

Connie Lenart
Chap 13

When writing argumentation verses persuasion, persuasion shows emotion, passion, and is one-sided, the subject is first-person. Argumentation is balanced, debate format, reasonable, objective, counterclaims, third-person. There are three parts to an argument give reasons, you must have a counter argument. See another persons views don't make it personal. Present your argument, have a counter argument, and re-buttle. Ask questions and give reasons. Persuade your opinion give your side of the argument without winning. You need specific reasons, give details, state your opinion, give examples.  Give two or three reasons this will strengthen your argument. This will make your writing more persuasive  for your audience by giving reasons and examples. You want to persuade your reader into agreeing with you. Have a clear position don't sit on the fence choose one side or the other. In your introduction make it interesting or controversial. Thesis, state your position claim topic and your opinion on it. The body is for reasons and details. Give three good reasons and additional details. Then you need a counter argument- opposing view; reader will recognize both sides. State why your opinion is so strong sound persuasive. Use simple factual statements, recognize your audience, agree, focus, and then take action. Keep your tone upbeat and positive bring them to your side, convince them your side is correct. Use examples, facts, statistics, and experts for evidence.

           

Steph Welsh

30 September 2014

English 121

Argument beyond pro and con

            What stuck out to me the most was how this cartoon tried to make me understand the pro, and con of an argument .It did surprised me was a just having a conversation are actually where an academic arguments starts. Nothing really excited me or angered me, I like reading the comic in stand of the reading another chapter. I understood more about pro and con of an argument essay by seeing the WHAT (facts) HOW (circumstances) WHO relationships) WHY (reasons) (Issue 4).As an student it is important to get your argument right gather all the information and make sure you can back it up.

Steph Welsh

30 September 2014

English 121

Chapter 13

            Reading chapter 13 gave a lot of argumentation and persuasion examples, to try and understand. What stuck out the most to me was the essay on should juvenile offenders be tried as adults? I do feel the argument is good what should the courts do to juvenile that commit serious crimes. From twelve to seventeen are they real criminals or are they just babies trying to get away with murder. In my opinion at the age of twelve you already know the difference between right and wrong, and that is where adult crime adult time should come in no matter what age you are.

            It still surprising after all these years that we are still dealing with what to do when children commit serious crimes. We have more children nowadays than ever before it’s time to change the system .Did I learn anything new yes did not realize how many kids that lock up for murder. It angers the excuses we are making for the children that commit serious crimes. And no I have no experience in the problem we are having with children committing serious crime.

            My professional reaction for chapter 13 is making sure you get your argument straight before your try to back it up. Get your audience and your purpose, and then get your supporting details.

·         Logos: refers to the sound reasoning of the argument.

·         Pathos: refers to the emotional component of persuasion.

·         Ethos: refers to establishing your honesty, integrity, and reliability so your reader will trust you and, therefore, believe what you say (575).

ATTACK OF THE ENGLISH TEACHER
    By Renee Fannon

       From observing "Attack of the English Teacher" I was able to learn see how each of the students has their own creative twist on each of their posts. Actually, the first post I saw was about this very same assignment and the author was actually reviewing our blog. I thought that was ironic, and also his statements about the name of our blog made me giggle. Another student had a really eye catching title "Student Blog Battle!" in big bold letters really caught my attention and made me want to read their review. As any English student knows, a strong piece of writing always needs to have something to hook you into reading. This author did an excellent job at grabbing my attention, so A+ on that!

        As far as constructive criticism goes, the posts were really different and I loved that about the blog. However, the background is a little boring. The background was just plain books, if I was too have stumbled across this blog on the internet I would probably close out of it due to the fact that their background is just rows and rows of books. Do something a little more exciting! You're blog name is fun and creative, so this blog group should obtain that same creative and fun tone even throughout the background!

        Their frequency of posts is just as I expected. All of the members of the group seem to post when they are supposed to and ALL member contribute to the posts! Their blog is easy to follow, there are clear headings so I know exactly when a new post is beginning. They are very organized in a good way. The actual content of the writing is fun to read and I actually found myself reading many of their posts! I really enjoyed visiting this blog, and who knows, maybe I'll check it out again!

Connie Lenart
Sept. 23, 2014
In class review of group blogs

The frequency of post on eng1blogger.blogspot.com were on average one per week. It seems they have spent a fair amount of time on this blog post. The writing skills seem excellent. They have a lot of knowledge and information on their posts. Organization and clarity are well organized and clear. Aesthetically pleasing is lacking. There is not much color a little boring. I would have enjoyed it more if there were color or more images. It was very user-friendly.

  











 

Steph Welsh

September 22, 2014

English 121

Drunk Writer Talk

Drunk Writer Talk

            By going through this blog I have found it very organized the students that are part of drunk writer talk are not in any way intoxicated, they definitely know what there are doing. In my opinion it looks like they have spent hours putting it together. The organization looks very sophisticated, like something you would find in a dictionary.

 The design is very advanced; definitely intelligent individuals put this together. The pictures that are posted makes it look very attention-grabbing like something I would stop and read. Even though the writing is very small it helps it look very professional.

I have found this blog very creative and easy to understand, and the information and style is easy to stay focused, and what a very good job on putting this blog together.

               

 

Steph Welsh

September 16^th 2014

English 121

Chapter 7

Exemplification

 

 

            All the examples that stuck out to me were about the same, there are always two sides to every story. Surprising nothing surprised me, all the essays in chapter #7, in my opinion appeared to be not made up. It appeared it occurred a long time ago, but it still goes on today.

            The discrimination against race how much money you have and where you live, should not go on in today’s world, and  I think the worst is the color of your skin.

            I leaned to get all the facts before you start writing, make sure you get all the examples that you can come up with and be able to back it up, it’s  really important.

            The anger that sit in when I was reading “On Being the Target of Discrimination” (page 262). Children are not born to discriminate they are taught some at a very young age. Some kids grow up doing the same thing that their parents do, and that makes me sad that discrimination   still goes on nowadays. I have had many problems with discrimination because of my color of skin, where I went to school, and how I speak has always worked against me.

            As a student I think it is important to make sure you are not copying anyone else’s homework. Gather your own examples support your own details and write with the best of your own knowledge. (Clip Art)

In Class Thingie 


1. What is his "Freaking Point"?
        "But what about lifosuction- the removal from one's biography of innocuous yet somehow unsightly elements that happen to be true?"

2. Count the number of examples
       After reading this article, we decided it was nearly impossible to actually count the number of examples. However, we created a ballpark between 25-30...at least.

3. Book Questions

Reading Closely and Thinking Critically
      Question 1: People engage in lifosuction for the removal of their biography of innocuous but still remain unsightly elements that happen to be true.
      Question 2: We believe that Murphy is trying to say that lifosuction is not a big deal because to some sort of degree we all partake in lifosuction. It is a way for us to not be judged in our society, just some people take it to a whole new level.
      Question 3: From all the examples that Murphy has given during this article, it seems like he is giving both harmless examples and also not so harmless examples. In one part he talks about how someone earned their degree, but in another he talks about how someone earned an award for something that he didn't actually do. So it's hard to say whether he is using harmless examples.
       Question 4: Multiple of Murphy's examples are from famous people, so removing their privileges make it seem like they started from the bottom and made it to the very top, making themselves seem more inspirational.
       Question 5: Menino's comment was "You're just trying to dig up dirt on me". This is very ironic because all they were doing was bringing up the fact that he earned a degree, which is a very good thing. He almost seems like he is ashamed of it.

Examining Structure
     Question 1: The thesis that we addressed earlier is still a very general thesis, it does not narrow down on a specific person. Although most of his examples are very specific and talk about certain people; in paragraph 8 they discuss how "we all permit ourselves to some degree of cosmetic suppression", therefore making it more relatable to readers.
     Question 2: The tone of this essay is informative without being judgmental. It gives great examples to really make sure you grasp the topic of "lifosuction", without being extremely boring. It is also very straight forward and it is fluently like this throughout the entire essay.
     Question 3:  The examples in paragraph 3 contrast with the examples in the rest of the essay by using factual examples and many of them. The author uses these examples to add support to not only the rest of his examples, but also to his thesis.
    Question 4:  Murphy introduces many of his topic sentences with examples, this can be seen through out the paragraphs 1,2,3,6, and 7.
    Question 5: Murphy uses Spatial order to illustrate and organize is examples.
Considering Language and Style
     Question 1:  We believe that Murphy uses Lifosuction as a clever word as he uses it in the same sense to the word lipo suction, describing that people may alter their lives to the way they want them to be portrayed, he also uses this in the tense that more people should be encouraging others to use this for of detachment from public view.
Question 2: Tribune: An official in ancient Rome chosen by the plebeians to protect their interest.
                    Dint:      A blow or a stroke, typically made with a weapon in fighting.
                    Cadre:   A small group of people specially trained for particular purpose or profession.
                   Pugilist: A boxer especially a professional one.
                   Proletariat:   Workers or working class people;regarding collectively (often used with                               reference to Marxism.)


4. Our "Freaking Points"
    Renee- "Senior year for a high school students is one of the most stressful times in a teenagers life."
   Colter- "In bringing us closer, technology has actually torn us away from each other in the forms of social media and cellphones."
   Steph- "A surprising moment for a woman is the moment she finds out she is having a child."
   Brittney- "There are many perspectives associated with the way women are portrayed and meant to be perceived through television and the media."
     

Chapter 7 Exemplification

    As I read through Chapter 7, I made the observation that this chapter briefly talks about "generalizing" and how using examples can help you narrow down a broad statement. What I found interesting was how it seems as if in multiple chapters of this book they talk about how to not over generalize whether it is in an argumentative paper or persuasive paper. Although they would give you tips on how to avoid generalizing too much, they never once gave you the tip to give examples. Perhaps it is because they decided to make an entire chapter out of it. However, I find that this would probably be the most effective way to avoid over generalizing. I'm sure in pervious writing pieces I have used this technique without even second guessing it. One thing that I did never think of taking into consideration is "Combining Patterns for A Purpose"; specifically I have never thought of narrating a scene or topic instead of just describing it through the five main senses.
     From a professional point of view, I believe that "Hypothetical Examples" is definitely something I will take into consideration next time I am writing a paper. I always seem to get stuck trying to think of examples, however I never thought of taking hypothetical examples. I believe that making hypothetical examples rather than examples from my life is a way to get the readers attention better. Mainly because if I use an example that a larger number of people know then the readers can relate which will draw in their attention. However, something I have noticed is that many ads use hypothetical examples like when they are selling a product. They say stuff like "How many times have you wished you had a towel that absorbs all the mess instantly?"....well actually I have never wished that because it's honestly not something I think about every single day. Either way, this one little section is definitely going to help me in the long run.

Reading Response: Examining Exemplification

Chapter 7 of the textbook Patterns For a Purpose evaluates the use of Exemplification, which is: “A PATTERN OF DEVELOPMENT that uses specific instances (examples) to clarify a point, add interest, or persuade (Clouse 234).”  What I found most enjoyable and informational about this chapter was the amount of options that can be used when incorporating exemplification into writing.  Chapter seven described in great detail the variety of purposes and ways exemplification can be used, for example exemplification can be used for several different purposes beyond academic essay writing, when building a resume for employment purposes exemplification can be used, as well as for business and community purposes when trying to persuade one of something.  Further more exemplification can be used in many different forms, some of which include description, use of factual information, narration, compare and contrast as well as cause and effect analysis. 

            I especially enjoyed the example of exemplification used by Ralph Ellison, “On Being the Target of Discrimination (262).” Ellison uses an array of exemplifications by combining his own experiences and feelings of being the target of discrimination when experiencing discrimination and desegregation as a child.  Ellison incorporates the uses of description and narration through his essay as great examples.  In conclusion this chapter has also shown me that critical thinking continues to carry over from previous chapter readings when evaluating exemplification writings.  As described on page 241 “Are the examples real or made up?” and “Are there enough examples in enough detail?” These are critical questions I found will come in handy when using exemplification my own writings.

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"Reading" Images
   

        The image picked by our blog group did not have a name; however what we do know is that it was created to be used as a computer desktop background. The image itself illustrates fine art; yet it is a digital image that mimics an oil painting. An observation that we made was that there were multiple different images similar to the one we picked. Everyone image of this "series" involved that same art elements we found that stood out the most such as color, line, and shadowing. If we were to name this piece of work, we would name it "The Romantic Walk", there are many reasons why we all thought of the same similar ideas when we saw this picture and it was all due to the art elements we were taught in class.
        Let's start off with color. This piece of artwork is vibrant, and very dramatic. It uses bold, contrasting colors that stand out instantly. The leaves on the trees are all done with very big brushes that almost look like they were just "dotted" on the image to make it look like leaves. However, we believe that the main purpose was to show off the color, not the leaves; which explains why they aren't more realistic colors. Also, they use of colors such as the reds, blues, and oranges make you feel passionate, calm, and warm. They all clash (in a good way) to make you feel a variety of different positive feelings, almost romantic. Next, lets talk about the shading, the artist of this art piece did an excellent job of making this piece of work appear "wet" buy making it very glossy to give the effect that it is raining on this "romantic walk". There are multiple reflections on the pathway of the trees, the two humans, and of the lights that line that pathway.
       As far as the art element of lines, we believe that there are two "lines" that lead you to the main purpose of this picture. A part of us believed that the long, lanky trees lead you up to the vibrantly colored leaves. While another part of us believed that the illuminated, bright lights guided you down this pathway that the two people are walking down. Either way, they both lead you to the couple walking down this path. For texture, the painting looks rainy and glossy giving the illusion of rain. The leaves look they would feel as normal leaves do; bumpy and ridged. Also, this entire image looks as if it was created using short, sharp strokes with a large brush. There is not a single smooth brush stroke on this image, which makes it unique.

 

Chapter 7

Connie Lenart

 

          Chapter 7 is extremely important to help with writing. We use examples daily in our everyday lives. Examples help us to explain things and clarify what we are trying to say. The point we are trying to make to help our audience to understand what we are writing. We should be careful about over generalizing we must make sure the examples we are using are fact and not fiction. There are a number of times that we might use exemplification. We will defiantly use it in school, the workplace, and the community, sending a letter to friend or running for a political position. We must always remember how important it is to organize details when writing. We can also use pictures, cartoons, and, graphs to help explain things.

 

                        The essays in chapter 7 were somewhat interesting, however I really enjoy reading three of them. I liked reading the one on discrimination, the homeless, and “Reunion.” The other ones I found very boring and too much information in them. Too many names and facts I felt somewhat confused when reading them. They did not keep my attention. I felt as though I could relate to the other essays I mentioned above. The essays about discrimination and homelessness is something we witness pretty much on a daily basis. I find it very sad but true. The “Reunion” essay was my favorite I found it very funny I wish it would have been a little longer and maybe a different ending but overall it made me laugh.         

 

 

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Infliction Assignment

     The infliction that our team decided to pick is "Assuming that what is true for one person is true for everybody". In our own words, this definition means that no matter where you go and what environment you are in people will always assume that everyone feels/is capable of the same things. This is seen in places such as ads and goes as far as the workplace. For ads, the constructors of the ads always assume that everyone is the same and never singles out a group of people. However, this is effective because it puts the idea in your mind that everyone needs this product. But as we all know, this is not true. In the workplace, bosses and other employees always assume that because one employee can do a task, all the employees can do the task. It is a giant double standard. It's like a one size fits all.
      To avoid this infliction, the most simple way to do so is just not to assume that everyone thinks the same/feels the same about a certain thing. One way to do is, just be more open minded and be able to see other people's view points. Don't believe that because you think one way that everyone thinks the same way. This is not wrong, it's actually quite normal. Everyone has their own unique mind, so we should remember that when we go to write an argumentative paper or persuasive paper.

Life Hacker Blog Review
September 8, 2014

  The blog Life Hacker would absolutely be rated a 10 out of 10. From articles on how to "Hack Your Mind",  "How to Throw A Punch Correctly", and "Measure Your Cash Flow" there are literally articles for every age group, personal preferences, and questionable blog readers.

  The "Hacking Your Mind" article is a psychology article discussing the study of how being overtired effects you from being productive in certain times of the day. So from the members of our group, Renee was attracted to this article the most because she is majoring in psychology. The "How to Throw A Punch Correctly" article is completely different from the previous article. Basically the article discusses how to truly punch someone and then goes into how to stage a punch. Our teacher, Jenn Zuko, actually contributed to this article by performing how to stage a punch. I think it is safe to say that all of us were interested to find out what goes on behind the scenes. 

   Life Hacker has articles for everyone out there and clearly attracts a large variety of different readers, which in result makes this blog quite popular. If you have a question, Life Hacker has an answer (more than likely). Along with attracting multiple different audiences, the blog is very fluent with their posting and there is at least one post that gets uploaded every single day. There is always something new on the blog, which is why our group decided to pick this one as our personal favorite.
    As far as the structure of the blog, this blog is equipped with easy to read articles, useful images and visuals, and the blog is all around easy to navigate. I think we've all come across a website that was an eye sore and was impossible to follow around; however with this blog anyone can learn how to navigate within the first time of visiting the blog.
    There is no doubt in our minds that this blog is perfect for everyone and deserves a 10 out of 10 rating.

Chapter 5 Descriptive Writing Response

While reading chapter 5 there were many points that stuck out to me concerning proper use of description patterns within writing.  I learned how important it is to be able to know how to properly express what you, as the writer is feeling through words. Therefore, descriptive observations of feelings, smells and visuals are extremely vital to a good writing, or as the text states, “observe, describe and evaluate (Clouse pg122).”  In addition, I was surprised to see how much description plays into such a wide variety of workplace demands. Furthermore I learned that descriptions are critical to a writer in a specific way that can either make or break a writers soul objective. I especially thought the objective and expressive detail points were important being that they open up a writer’s options, allowing them to choose which view points they would like to go with. Along with what type of view point they would like to build their writing upon, for example choosing an emotional stand point opposed to a factual one could make a big difference when considering the audience and purposes of the writing. Lastly, the expressive detail examples listed on page 125 were especially inspiring to me. I found myself wanting to read more and more as the descriptive detail sucked me in and left me thinking, “wow…this is how I want to write.” In addition one of the most important points which stuck out to me when considering descriptive word usage was that instead of using a dictionary or thesaurus to get a point across, simply spicing up general nouns in replace of specific nouns can provide an overall more efficient reading experience. In addition, when going back to read the final draft it will be obvious that the use of descriptive words can make all the difference, “specific words are more descriptive (Clouse pg126).”

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Chapter 5 Reading Response
September 2nd

        As I read through Chapter 5 of Reading for A Purpose, I found that multiple topics the book discussed I already knew from previous English classes. I took an entire workshop on how to write descriptive papers, short stories, and suspenseful stories. However, the one section that really caught my attention was "Deciding on A Dominant Impression". To briefly cover what this topic discussed...it basically tells you to pick one "dominate impression" (or a notable quality of the object you are describing). Doing so will help you be able to manage a complex topic to a reader. Trying to describe a mass object is very tricky, and this was one piece of advice that I never been told. Personally, I think this will benefit me deeply.
        From a professional point of view, I believe that this chapter did a very good job at giving enough examples for each different tip of how to properly describe things. However, I did believe the topic of "Descriptive Words" was a bit childish for a college level textbook. Especially since they used words such as "walk", "spoke", "look", and "went". I believe that those are all words that any 8th grader could come up with an alternative for. If I could give them any sort of advice, it would be to maybe use more complex or college appropriate words. However, that is just my two cents on that. All and all, I thought this chapter was very well constructed and was quite informative (in some topics).


Renee Fannon

Connie Lenart

September 1, 2014

             My personal reaction to the essay “Embedded” was easy for me to relate to. About five years ago my grandmother fell and broke her hip and ended up in a nursing home for rehabilitation. She eventually was released tried going home with help but, that didn’t work out well. She then went into an assisted living, however that wasn’t the answer either. She needed more care although she didn’t really get more care just more medication to keep her quiet and restraints and alarms. She eventually died a few years later in the nursing home. It was somewhat of a relief when she passed knowing she wasn’t in a place she hated.

               The author’s description of the nursing home during his rehabilitation session was so vivid and clear to me. From the smells and sounds the medicated patients and the cries for help. I also, saw the neglected patients restrained in wheel chairs in the hallways for hours at a time.  The essay made me so sad to think how many patient are living this life. To hear the author explain being the patient who is a highly intelligent man with a body that doesn’t work correctly. The humiliation he went through as a patient. I also believe the employees are over worked and the facilities understaffed. It is a huge problem in our society when it comes to nursing home care. I wish there was a simple solution to fix the problem.

                I enjoyed reading chapter five.  I love cooking so the introduction describing the food caught my attention. There is a lot of informative information in this chapter that was easy to understand. I learned the difference between expressive details and objective details. It was very interesting the paragraph on dominant impression and how not to go overboard with all the different detail. The sensory details are somewhat self-explanatory, but very important to include. This is huge for the author to get the point across with great description so the audience or reader can connect. Also, when revising I loved the examples instead of saying “the child is tired” it is important to explain the details of the child such as, rubbing their eyes or yawning.